Nowadays celebrities earn more money than politicians. What are the reasons for this? Is it a positive or negative development?

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most recent trend is
celebrities
are making more profit
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with
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politicians
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the specific causes of
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economy. Two main reasons are mentioned here for the huge
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difference between
celebrities
and
politicians
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First
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reason is today the internet has grown tremendously, so
celebrities
like actors or pop singers can easily have
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access to post
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video
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about their songs or trailers
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the
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social media within
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minute’s million views and likes
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Second
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reason is generally
celebrities
like actors are one of the most familiar persons to
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all age group people
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youngsters,
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everyone
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to see their films
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the big screen and the box office collection will give
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good profit to them.
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the other hand, most of the
politicians
are exploiting government funds and
this
huge remuneration difference between
celebrities
and
politicians
also
will stimulate the
politicians
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more
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.
Furthermore
, legislative and parliament members will not concentrate
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the country and public welfare.
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economic disaster and system failure
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the country.
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carrier
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is a not profession, it is a public service. In a nutshell,
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between
politicians
and
celebrities
are common. All
politicians
must
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think about their people and country because they are all selected by the public. Simultaneously,
celebrities
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people and fans are following them
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Improve clarity by ensuring each paragraph focuses on a single main idea. Use topic sentences to introduce these ideas and ensure smooth transitions between paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Work on grammatical accuracy to avoid minor errors, especially in sentence structure. For instance, replace 'this is an adverse decline' with 'this is an adverse development.'
task achievement
The essay makes a good attempt to address both parts of the question: reasons for the earnings difference and whether it is positive or negative.
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The ideas presented are relevant and pertinent to the topic, showing a clear understanding of the issue.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present and provide a framework for the essay, contributing to its coherence.

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