Write a letter to the information officer at the tape information office asking for information about the tertiary preparation certificate. Describe your education background and your reason for wanting to do the course

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To, The information officer. Dear Sir/ Madam, I am Omkar Sharma and I recently saw a television advertisement regarding the certifying course that your institution is offering. Let me provide you

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summary of my education, I graduated in mass media

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that

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pursued a

film making

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filmmaking

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certificate

last

year which will be completed soon. The tertiary preparation program that your institution

isoffering

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is offering

offering

currently

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in demand. It is

also

quite reasonable in the current market. Certainly, it will be helpful to me

in contrast

with

filmmaking

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the filmmaking

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industry.

Although

this

program will cover major topics related to

film making

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filmmaking

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Furthermore

Iwould

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I would

like some information on the eligibility criteria, availability slots and other major requirements if any. I have attached my mailing address and contact details

along with

this

letter and I am hoping to hear from you soon. Yours faithfully Omkar

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coherence cohesion

Your letter could be more clearly structured by dividing it into paragraphs: one for your introduction, one for your educational background, one for your rationale for the course, and one for your request for further information.

task achievement

There are a few grammatical errors and awkward phrases that should be corrected for greater clarity. For example, instead of 'isoffering,' it should be 'is offering,' and 'Along with that i pursued' should be 'Along with that, I pursued'.

coherence cohesion

The greeting and closing are appropriately formal and fit the tone of the letter well.

task achievement

You successfully cover the significant points that need to be addressed: your background, the course you are interested in, and the information you need.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

9 paragraphs

142 words

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The Greeting

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