The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
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the refrigerator
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Time spent washing clothes, preparing meals and cleaning reached 50 hours in 1920 and fell slightly to 20 hours per week in 1960. Add an article
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it decreased to a negligible amount of time of 10 hours in 2019.Submitted by Shaxnoza on
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