The chart below show household spending patterns in two countries between 1980 and 2008.

The chart below show household spending patterns in two countries between 1980 and 2008.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below show household spending patterns in two countries between 1980 and 2008.
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The pie chart demonstrates
household
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the household
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proportion of spending in
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UK
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the UK
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and New Zealand in
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years
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the years
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1980 and 2008.
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, It is noticeable that the proportion of spending on
food
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and
drink
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decreased in both countries over the
28 year
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period.
While
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utility bills rose. New Zealand residents spent their time
to
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on
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utility bills than
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UK
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their UK
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counterparts. The individuals spent 23 per cent of
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money
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their money
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on
food
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and
drink
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in
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UK
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the UK
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. The difference between the per cent of
money
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was 7% of
food
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and
drink
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. The difference between the per cent of
money
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was 12% of
food
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and
drink
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by 2008 year.
While
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utility bills
was
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were
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increased. Leisure activities accounted
the
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for the
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highest proportion of
UK
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counterparts spending in both
years
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.
As well as
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, in fact, New Zealand residents spent 18% of
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money
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their money
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on recreation in 1980. After that,
this
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level dropped to 1% by 2008. Other costs comprised
same
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the same
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level of budget in both
years
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during the 27
years
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, years, food, drink, money with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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