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The charts below show the protein and calorie intakes of people in different parts of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the protein and calorie intakes of people in different parts of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given diagram
provide
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 information relating to
the
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apply
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protein
 and
calorie
 consumption in various regions over the globe.
Overall
, it can be seen that North
America
 exceededly consumed both the standard of reasonable
calorie
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calories
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as well as
protein
,
whereas
 the opposite trend was true for the other nations.
Additionally
, the
absorbtion
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absorption
 of
protein
primarily
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 extracted from different sources which contributed to the
rich
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 of
calorie
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calories
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, with the exception
India
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of India
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 where animal
protein
 predominated over
other
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others
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one
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ones
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. When it comes to the consumption of
protein
, India and East Africa witnessed an equalization on other
protein
 at around 15,
nonetheless
, there was a minute discrepancy on those taken from animals at accurately 3 units, with the East Africa dominated. In terms of the Americas area, Latin
America
 possessed the level of other
protein
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proteins
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 at approximately 32, which
more
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is more
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 than two times in comparison with animal one. Regarding the
overconsumped
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overconsumed
 nation of both
protein
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proteins
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, the animal
protein
 was only 18,
while
 other
protein
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proteins
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 surpassed over 44 units. Moving to the
calorie
 intake, India and East Africa,which were much
more
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lower than the ideal
absorbtion
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absorption
, recharged only 2000 and nearly 2400
calorie
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calories
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, respectively. With
respects
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respect
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 to
remaining
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the remaining
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 nations, Latin
America
was
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nearly
reach
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reached
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 the standard of
calorie
 intake at around 3000,whilst North
America
 was redundant over 350
calorie
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calories
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words protein, calorie, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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