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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mainfeatures, and make comparisons where relevant

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mainfeatures, and make comparisons where relevant
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the data frame
show
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shows
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 the data on consumer
expenditure
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 in food, clothing and education which belongs to five different nations by 2002 Generally speaking, it is evident that food and drink accounted for
the
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a
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numerous
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large
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 percentage of spending,
whereas
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, there was a solely mere proportion of national
expenditure
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in
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on
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 clothing and leisure in all
the
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apply
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five countries.
initially
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, it can be seen that in 2002,
ireland
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Ireland
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, Turkey spent respectively 28.91% and 32,14% on cuisine, meanwhile the
expenditure
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in
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on
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 education only showed
the
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a
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 percentage under 5%.
beside
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, the consumption of clothing in
ireland
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Ireland
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 and
turkey
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Turkey
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 both stood at around 6.5%.
additionally
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,
although
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 only 16.36% of national
expenditure
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 was
spend
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spent
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 on which belongs to
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Italy
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italy
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Italy
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, there was
a
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the
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 highest percentage
consumer
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of consumer
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 clothing,
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accounting
accouting
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accounting
 for 9% moving onto the remaining statistics, it is observed that even though
Spain
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Spain's
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 market
show
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shows
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 18.8% of spending on food and drinks, more than just over 3% of
Sweden
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Sweden's
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 market, the proportion of education
expenditure
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 in Sweden solely stood at 3.22% which
halve
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halves
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 the
stastictis
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statistics
statistic
 of Spain.
moreover
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, there was a compact difference
around
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of around
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 1% between the proportion of clothing
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between
bewteen
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between
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sedan
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seden
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Seden
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 and
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Spain
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spain
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Spain
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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