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The bar chart shows the number of hours worked by men & women per week in Australia in 2007. Summarise information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the number of hours worked by men & women per week in Australia in 2007. Summarise information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the given chart illustrates the
propotion
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proportion
 of
australian
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Australian
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in
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of
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 both
gender
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genders
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worked
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who worked
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 each week in the year 2007.
It is clear that
 in 2007 , the amount of time females spent
on worked
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working
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were
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was
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 higher than males from 0 to 20
hours
 but between 30 and 80
hours
 it was
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the completely
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completely
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 opposite .
Addtionally
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Additionally
 the number of
hours
 which women and
men
 spent on work
were
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was
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 the same in
this
 period. From 0 to 10
hours
 , 15
percentage
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per cent
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 of women workers was 3
time
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times
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 as much as the
men
one
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apply
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.With around 22,5
propotion
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proportion
promotion
, the female still
double
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doubles
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 the
percentage
 of the
male
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males
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 one in the range of 10 to 20
hours
. Approximately 42,5
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per cent
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percentage
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per cent
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 of
men
spending on
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spend
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 30 to 50
hours
 per week
while
 in
this
 range of
hours
 ,
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apply
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the
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apply
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women only had 35
propotion
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per cent
 of
total
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the total
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.From 60 to 80
hours
, the
figures
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figure
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of
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for
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men
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male
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 workers was 30
percentage
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per cent
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 which
double
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is double
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 the
propotion
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proportion
of
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for
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female
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females
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one
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apply
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.
Furthermore
 , over 80
hours
 the
percentage
 in both
gender
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genders
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were
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was
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 the same.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words propotion, hours, men, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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