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The table shows the information about medical care in three European countries between 1980 and 2000.

The table shows the information about medical care in three European countries between 1980 and 2000.
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The presented table
illustrate
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 the information regarding health care in three different European nations over the period of time from 1980 to 2000. The figures were measured in per 1000 people and
days
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.
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, it can be seen that the
numbers
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 of physicians showed an upward trend in all three nations, except
France
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.
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, the typical length of time staying in hospital displayed a fall in three countries. Looking at the figures in
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details
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, Austria had
lowest
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 number of physicians throughout the period. The
figure
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 started at 0.8 per
thousand
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 people in 1990
,
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 and
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 increased steadily to 1 per
thousand
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 residents after 20 years.
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France
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, the rate was the second highest in 1980, with 2.4 per
thousand
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 citizens. In 1990, it
gradual
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 fell to 2.2 and dropped sharply to 1.3 per
thousand
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 people in 2000. For Sweden, the data began at the highest with 3.6 in 1980. After that, it decreased considerably to 3 in 1990 before
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 up to 3.8 after a decade.
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, the number of beds in
hospital
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hospitals
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 in Austria exhibited the most significant change from 1.4 in 1980 to 3.7 in 2000. About Sweden, the
figure
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 remained stable in the first 2 decades and rose to 6.9 in 2000. The data related to
France
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 was 0.2 at the beginning and quadrupled in 1990 and doubled its
figure
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 in 2000. Turning to the remaining statistics, the longevity in hospitals in Sweden topped the table, with 23
days
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 in 1980. In 1990, it went down to 18
days
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 and soared up to 21
days
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 in 2000.
France
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 was at the bottom, the data was 9
days
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 in 1980 and declined 2
days
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 per decade.
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, the
figure
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 was 18
days
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 and reduced 3 times in 1990 and increased to 8
days
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 in 2000.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words days, france, figure, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Healthcare
  • Healthcare expenditure
  • Life expectancy
  • Medical technology
  • Government spending
  • Population health
  • Access to medical care
  • Healthcare policies
  • Economic climate
  • Inflation rates
  • Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
  • Urbanization
  • Demographics
  • Public health
  • Quality of care
  • Preventive medicine
  • Chronic diseases
  • Healthcare infrastructure
  • Universal health coverage
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