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The bart chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting the main features, and make comparison where relevant

The bart chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting the main features, and make comparison where relevant
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The given bar chart illustrates the proportion of family's weekly
income
 spent for different categories in 1968 and 2018
Overall
 , it can be seen that as
the
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time goes , there was an increase in money paid for housing , transport and leisure .
Additionally
 , fuel and power was seen as a category which had
least
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 spending in
both
 years Regarding categories which witnessed a growth in weekly spending ,
both
 transport and leisure in 1968 were nearly 7% and 10% , respectively .
Additionally
 ,
both
 of them increased by double by 2018 at approximately 15% and over 20%
income
 .
Similarly
 , Housing made up exactly 10%
weekly
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income
that
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 was just
a
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half of 2018 .
By contrast
 , household goods remained unchanged at about 15% weekly money throughout
this
 period . Turning to
remaining
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cateogires
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countries
 where there was a decline in money spent . As for food , most weekly
income
 was paid for
this
 requirement by accounting for over a third in 1968
that
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 was 2 times more than the year
of
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2018 . Meanwhile ,
both
 fuel and power
as well as
 personal goods experienced a slight decline from over 5% weekly
income
 to just under
of
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it in 2018 .
Last
 but not least , clothing and footwear had a drop by double to exactly 5% .
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "additionally".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, both with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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