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The graph shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005.. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph compared the number of players participating in four different kinds of sports in one country for twenty years.
Overall
, it can be seen apparently that Rugby had a downward trend,
while
 there was an upward in Tennis throughout the period. Meanwhile, the rest of
sports
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the sports
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 categories stayed at the same level for two decades. In the beginning, there were around 250
people
 taking part in
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the Rugby
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Rugby
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the Rugby
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 section
then
 dramatically decreased to 200 and 50, in 1995 and 2005, respectively. In the meantime, Tennis had 150 players in the initial year, before the figure gradually rose to 200
people
 in the same year with a previous sport. Afterwards, there were 220
people
 playing Tennis, in 2005.
Furthermore
, about 60
people
 enrolled in Basketball in the first year and steadily remained until the end of the period.
Additionally
, Badminton was chosen to play by only 50
people
, in 1985, which eventually slightly went to just below 50 ten years later.
Then
, the figure climbed up to the previous level before staying at
this
 point for a decade.
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