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the linegraph below shows the average house price between 1997 and 2014

#linegraph #house #price
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This
 graph demonstrates
average
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the average
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house
price
 from 1997 to 20014
on
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in
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 countries A,
B
 and C.
Overall
 it can be seen that there
were
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was
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 considerable growth in
house
cost
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costs
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 in
Country
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Countries
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 A and
B
 during that period of time. The
price
 of housing in
country
 C had
slight-growth
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slight growth
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 during
these
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this
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 18
years
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year
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 period. Looking at the details, the
house
 worth in
country
 a was marginally going up and the
price
 of that skyrocketed from 2000 to 2003 and reached the
cost
 above 500
thousand
dollar
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dollars
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, it experienced insignificant decline
untill
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until
 2006 and the one
house
 was worth almost 500
thousand
dollar
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dollars
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. Despite
that
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that,
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 the
cost
 of
house
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a house
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 soared to
the
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apply
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around 600
thousand
dollar
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dollars
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 per
house
. The
price
 of
house
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the house
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 remained almost stable from 2006 to 2014. If we look at the average housing
price
 of
Country
B
 we can see that the
price
 was growing
untill
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until
the
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2005 with approximately 300
thousand
dollar
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dollars
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 for one
house
,
however
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however,
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 the
price
 dropped in 2006 and only levelled off in 2006 from
this
 decline. The typical
price
 of
house
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a house
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 in
country
B
 reached
it
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its
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 peak
as
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of
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above 500
thousand
dollar
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dollars
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 per
house
 in 2012 and the
price
was going
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went
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 down
the
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for the
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 next two
year
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years
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. When it comes to the average
cost
 of
house
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a house
the house
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 in
country
 C
it
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apply
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the
price
 was increasing steadily until 2008 the
price
 and the
price
 dropped, In Spite of that the
cost
 recovered quickly and kept
stable
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a stable
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 increase
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coherence cohesion
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The essay includes relevant details from the graph.

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