The two maps below show the side of a college in 2006 and the present day

The two maps below show the side of a college in 2006 and the present day
The
map
illustrates two images,
where
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which
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depicted
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depict
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transformation
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the transformation
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of
college’s
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the college’s
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location
since
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from
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2006 to nowadays.
Overall
, the left
map
basically shows the territory of the college with only a few places,
while
the right compares the same area, but more developed with new facilities.
To begin
with, in 2006,
in
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at
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Lynwich
college
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College
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, there were two buildings for studying, one of them situated on
southern
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the southern
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side
,
while
another
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the other
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on
western
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the western
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.
And from
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From
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this
construction extended a path, which continued until to
library
, which was
in
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on
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eastern
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the eastern
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side
.
Car
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A car
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park
constructed
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was constructed
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on the northeastern
side
from
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of
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library
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the library
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, and on the southeastern
side
was
sports
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a sports
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field. There was a forest, which was located
in
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on
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the roadside and
park
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a park
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, which was between two buildings. In the nowadays
map
, some construction was replaced. Trees in the
park
has
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have been
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chopped down and
instead
of them,
library
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the library
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has moved. In the
center
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centre
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of the
map
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map,
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we can see a cafeteria, where there is a path, which
lead
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leads
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to the newly constructed bus stop.
Sport
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The sports
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center replaced the previous place of a
library
, and the territory of
car
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the car
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park
has diminished, so
the
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apply
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half of
this
area occupied
bike
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with bike
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storage.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words map, side, library, park with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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