The two maps below show the side of a college in 2006 and the present day
The
map
illustrates two images, where
Correct word choice
which
depicted
Wrong verb form
depict
transformation
of Correct article usage
the transformation
college’s
location Correct article usage
the college’s
since
2006 to nowadays.
Change preposition
from
Overall
, the left map
basically shows the territory of the college with only a few places, while
the right compares the same area, but more developed with new facilities.
To begin
with, in 2006, in
Lynwich Change preposition
at
college
, there were two buildings for studying, one of them situated on Capitalize word
College
southern
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the southern
side
, while
another
on Fix the agreement mistake
the other
western
. Correct article usage
the western
And from
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From
this
construction extended a path, which continued until to library
, which was in
Change preposition
on
eastern
Add an article
the eastern
side
. Car
Correct article usage
A car
park
constructed
on the northeastern Add a missing verb
was constructed
side
from
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of
library
, and on the southeastern Add an article
the library
side
was sports
field. There was a forest, which was located Correct article usage
a sports
in
the roadside and Change preposition
on
park
, which was between two buildings.
In the nowadays Correct article usage
a park
map
, some construction was replaced. Trees in the park
has
chopped down and Wrong verb form
have been
instead
of them, library
has moved. In the Add an article
the library
center
of the Change the spelling
centre
map
we can see a cafeteria, where there is a path, which Add a comma
map,
lead
to the newly constructed bus stop. Change the verb form
leads
Sport
center replaced the previous place of a Correct your spelling
The sports
library
, and the territory of car
Add an article
the car
park
has diminished, so the
half of Correct article usage
apply
this
area occupied bike
storage.Change preposition
with bike
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words map, side, library, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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