The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities
The bar chart compares the percentage of residents'
coffee
and tea purchasing and consuming in
last
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four weeks in five different areas of Australia's
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Adelaide had a less common in three categories.
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in two regions
wich
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is Melbourne and Hobart were the highest
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of visitation for people.
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, in Brisbane and Adelaide
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the lowest percentage of people buying fresh
coffee
both at approximately 33%. The highest proportion of visiting a cafe for tea or
coffee
was in Melbourne and Hobart, both accounting for nearly 63%. Followed by Sydney at around 61%.
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Adelaide was the only city where the proportion of buying instant
coffee
surpassed fresh
coffee
, with the former
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% and the latter at nearly 48%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey results
  • coffee and tea buying habits
  • instant coffee
  • fresh coffee
  • cafe culture
  • social influences
  • economic factors
  • city demographics
  • seasonal trends
  • marketing strategies
  • consumer preferences
  • availability
  • popularity
  • consumption patterns
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