The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon.
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The diagrams illustrate the stages in
life
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the life
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of one of the big fishes, the salmon. The cycle begins when adults lay the eggs between the small stones among the reeds in the upper
river
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, where the movement is slow. It took 5 to 6 months for the eggs to become a fry. The fires change the location to fast
flowing
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river
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and stay at the lower
river
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for the next 4
years
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, until they grow up to smolts. The smolts are three times bigger than the fries and their length varies from 12 to 15 sm. After 4
years
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, smolts move to the open sea, where, during the next 5
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they grow up into adult salmons. The mature fish can achieve 70-76 cm length, which is ten times more, compared to fry. Interestingly, for breeding the adult salmon should come back to the
river
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, where the cycle starts from the beginning.
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, it takes almost ten
years
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for salmon to breed,
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almost half of the time they live in the
river
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and half in the sea.
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, during the life cycle, the fish changes the environment three times and increases their length significantly from stage to stage.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words river, years with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Life cycle
  • Spawning
  • Freshwater
  • Juvenile
  • Fry
  • Adaptation
  • Migration
  • Smolt
  • Rivers
  • Ocean
  • Challenge
  • Growth
  • Return journey
  • Hatching ground
  • Perilous
  • Upstream
  • Obstacle
  • Ecological impact
  • Preservation
  • Disturbance
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