some people say that a lot of scientific research done today is a waste of time and money. what extent do you agree or disagree

opinions are divided on whether money and time
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spend
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on science experiments are unnecessary. many argue that money and time should be used to
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the
financial
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of the
country
and the
citizen'
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citizens'
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life
qualities.
this
writer completely disagrees with
this
viewpoint. it is true that most of the
financail
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financial
abilities in a
country
will be paid on other oder of the citizens before using on the scientific
study
.
therefore
, the amount of money ,which are spent on scientific
study
, will not be wasted.
moreover
,
study
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of the
scientists
recive
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receives
lots of convenient benefits that will support the economy of the
country
promote a lot. nowadays, many
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servives
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services
that we are usually using in our daily
life
are come
form
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from
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the
study
of
scientists
in the past. most of the inventions are very
usefull
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useful
which improve the inhabitants'
life
quality a lot. if these inventions had not been created
due to
the
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of negative
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, we
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have a comfortable
life
now.
therefore
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believed
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that scientific research
play
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an important role in the financial background of the
country
. all of the
scientists
in the world would like to find out the way that
reduce
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the unnecessary details of the process or the products.
futhermore
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Furthermore
, during the
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time,
scientists
can
also
reach special
achivement
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achievement
in their
life
which
create
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a lot of motivation for the
scientists
and governments.
for example
, America
have
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ogranized
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organised
a
numerous
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number of research on science to race with other countries.
however
,
these
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research
play
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an important role
to support
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America
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into
the
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robust
country
like now. in conclusion, scientific
researches
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are
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very necessary for all the countries in the world
due to
the benefit of economy and emotion,
whereas
there are many negative
opinion
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about these things.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • long-term benefits
  • advancements
  • unpredictable outcomes
  • high-risk field
  • significant breakthroughs
  • immediate benefit
  • financial drain
  • mismanaged funds
  • limited practical applications
  • public opinion
  • tangible results
  • spectacular successes
  • ethics
  • moral justification
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