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Most Countries allow 18 year olds to start driving a car. Some say it is good to allow it at this age, while others think that the age to start driving should be at least 25. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Most countries allow
people
 at least 18
years
 old to start driving a
car
,
however
, some
people
 say that it is good for them to learn at
this
 age
while
 others say should be at least 25.
Therefore
, in
this
 passage, I will provide my opinion about those points of view and give my opinion about it.
Firstly
, The advantage of allowing
people
 can drive their own
car
 for at least 18
years
 is that
people
 still have time to practice their driving skills if compared to
people
 who are 25
years
 old.
People
 who already be 25
years
 old have many things to do,
such
 as working,
thus
,
that is
 one of the reasons why
people
 who can start driving at 18
years
 old have benefits compared who can start driving at 25
years
 old.
Secondly
, driving a
car
 is a skill to takes time to master,
thus
, if the country allows
people
 to start driving a
car
 after 18
years
 old, they have more time to practice their skills.
However
, allowing to drive a
car
 at 18
years
 old
also
 has disadvantages.
Firstly
, how
people
 will buy their own
car
 at 18
years
 old without the support of their family because it is very hard for them to buy a
car
 with their own money.
Therefore
, purchasing their own vehicle without their parent's support is so hardly impossible.
Moreover
, driving a vehicle at 18
years
 old will
also
 get other
people
 in trouble because if the driver is not mature in their thinking and if an accident occurs who will be responsible for the cost or the victim's life? Summarily, I believe that both requirements for driving a
car
 have benefits and losses.
Nevertheless
, I strongly disagree with both points, I believe that driving a
car
 should consider a lot of factors not only age, and should be at least 20-year-olds
instead
 of 18 and 25-year-olds.
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task achievement
Ensure that arguments are thoroughly developed and supported with specific examples where relevant. This will make your points more convincing and detailed.
coherence cohesion
Work on improving the logical flow of the essay. Ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. Using transition words and phrases can help to achieve this.
coherence cohesion
Be cautious about grammatical errors and unclear sentences. This can affect the clarity of your ideas and their reception by the reader.
coherence cohesion
You provided a clear introduction that outlined the topic and your intention to discuss both viewpoints.
coherence cohesion
The essay includes a conclusion that summarizes your perspective and presents your stance on the issue.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • independence
  • responsibility
  • maturity
  • reckless behavior
  • statistically safer
  • accident rates
  • insurance costs
  • development of driving skills
  • inconvenience
  • public transportation
  • necessity
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