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The table below gives information about the different ways mobile phone owners use their phones in a developing country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about the different ways mobile phone owners use their phones in a developing country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided table demonstrates data about how mobile users consume
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their cellphones with several various ways to use in an advanced
country
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 in various three years. It can be clearly seen that the highest amount of ways to use mobile
phones
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 was for making calls in the
country
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.
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,the population did not have any opinion about recording video with their
phones
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 over the period. In 2006 and 2008,the percentage of using mobile
phones
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 for making calls was 100
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percent
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 in a developing
country
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.(Which was the highest amount of usage over the period).
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,in 2010,76 per
cent
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 of the population tended to take photos with their cellphones in an
advance
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country
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,just ahead of
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 amount in 2006 and 2008 at 66 per
cent
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 and 71 per
cent
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,respectively.
In addition
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,the proportion of sending and receiving text messages by mobile users was %73 in 2006 and %79 in 2010.
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,folk did not choose to play games with their
phones
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 at 17 per
cent
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 in 2006.But
this
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 measure was more in 2008 and 2010 at %42 and %41,respectively.Surprisingly,there was not any information about searching to internet in 2006,
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 the proportion of web users with
phones
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 was 41 per
cent
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 in 2008 and 73 per
cent
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 in 2010 in developing nations.
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,the average of people who liked to play music with mobiles was 12
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 in 2006,Compared to 18
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percent
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 and 26
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percent
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 who tended to play music in 2008 and 2010.
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,recording video with mobiles was unknown in 2006,and using
phones
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 for recording video in 2008 was not as popular as
2010
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 at 9
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percent
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 and 35 per
cent
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,respectively.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words country, phones, percent, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • frequent
  • activity
  • contrast
  • significantly
  • prevalent
  • speculate
  • trend
  • pattern
  • implication
  • develop
  • accessible
  • mobile-friendly
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