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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first chart presents the
energy
consumption
 breakdown in an average Australian household,
while
 the second chart demonstrates the corresponding
greenhouse
gas
emissions
.
Overall
, water heating and heating combined account for the majority of
energy
consumption
 in Australian households, contributing significantly to
greenhouse
gas
emissions
. Other appliances
also
 play a notable role in
greenhouse
gas
emissions
. Heating
consumption
 constitutes 42% of total
energy
 usage, which is roughly three times higher than the proportion of
greenhouse
gas
emissions
 at 15%. Water heating,
on the other hand
, has the highest
greenhouse
gas
emissions
 at 32%, despite only representing 2% of household
energy
 use.
Additionally
, other household appliances represent 15% of
energy
consumption
, nearly double the
greenhouse
gas
emissions
 proportion of 28%. Specifically, lighting and refrigeration contribute 4% and 7% to
energy
 usage respectively, and these percentages are replicated in
greenhouse
gas
emissions
 as well. Cooling has the smallest share in both
energy
consumption
 and
greenhouse
gas
emissions
.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, consumption, greenhouse, gas, emissions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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