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The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows social and economic indicators for four countries in 1994, according to United Nations statistics. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table presented information based on United Nations Statistics about four social and economic indicators for
Canada
,
Japan
, Peru, and
Angola
 in 1994.
Overall
, it is noticeable that
Japan
 had the highest annual income. These figures are in line with life expectancy, daily calorie supply, and adult literacy rate. Meanwhile,
Angola
 was the lowest on four social and economic barometers. In 1994,
Japanese
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the Japanese
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 earned 15,760 USD in a year.
This
 amount was about ten times Peruvians and
Angolan
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Angolans
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 reached in the same year (160 USD and 130 USD).
Next,
on
life’s
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the life’s
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 duration index,
Japan
 and
Canada
 had nearly the same level, with 78 and 76 years respectively, whilst
Angola
 was the lowest with 47 years.
On the other hand
, there was a similar pattern in the percentage of adult literacy
which
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Japan
 and
Canada
in
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at
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 the same level (99%) and
Angola
 was the lowest with 34% or a half lower than the proportion of Peruvians who could read.
By contrast
, the amount of calorie consumption in a day in 1994 showed a different prototype.
Canada
 was the highest with 3326
and
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followed by
Japan
 with 2846. The bottom two were not different, Peru was the third
with
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 1927, and
Angola
 was the lowest with almost a half lower than
Canada
 (1749).
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