The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with date open, km of routes, and passagers numbers per year in millions.
The table describes data about the underground
railway
systems in six major cities
with date
opened, Correct article usage
the date
kilometers
of route, and passenger numbers per Change the spelling
kilometres
year
in millions.
It is shown in the table that the first railway
to open between the six cities
is
the Wrong verb form
was
railway
in London in 1863, followed by Paris in 1900 and Tokyo in 1927. These three
cities
have the longest route in kilometers
with 394, 199, and 155 kilometers
respectively. Moreover
, these three
cities
have some of the highest number of passengers
per year
, with London at 775 million, Paris at 1191 million, and Tokyo at 1927 million passengers
.
On the other hand
, Washington DC, Kyoto, and Los Angeles had their railway
systems opened during
1976, 1981, and 2001 consecutively. The Change preposition
in
three
city's railroads cover a relatively shorter distance than the previous cities
, with the longest route in Washington at 126 kilometers
, Change the spelling
kilometres
while
Kyoto and Los Angeles only covering
11 and 26 Wrong verb form
cover
kilometers
. Change the spelling
kilometres
Furthermore
, the amount
of Change the quantifier
number
passengers
they get in a year
are
significantly lower than Correct subject-verb agreement
is
the
Change preposition
in the
three
other cities
with 144, 45, and 50 passengers
in Washington, Kyoto, and Los Angeles respectively.
To conclude
, the amount
of people and Change the quantifier
number
distance
covered by railways built in 1976 to 2001 have Fix the agreement mistake
distances
lower
amount of Add an article
a lower
passengers
a year
and cover shorter distance
than railways built Fix the agreement mistake
distances
in
1863 to 1927.Change preposition
from
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