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The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with date open, km of routes, and passagers numbers per year in millions.

The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with date open, km of routes, and passagers numbers per year in millions.
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The table describes data about the underground
railway
 systems in six major
cities
 with
date
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the date
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 opened,
kilometers
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kilometres
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 of route, and passenger numbers per
year
 in millions. It is shown in the table that the first
railway
 to open between the six
cities
is
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was
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 the
railway
 in London in 1863, followed by Paris in 1900 and Tokyo in 1927. These
three
cities
 have the longest route in
kilometers
 with 394, 199, and 155
kilometers
 respectively.
Moreover
, these
three
cities
 have some of the highest number of
passengers
 per
year
, with London at 775 million, Paris at 1191 million, and Tokyo at 1927 million
passengers
.
On the other hand
, Washington DC, Kyoto, and Los Angeles had their
railway
 systems opened
during
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in
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 1976, 1981, and 2001 consecutively. The
three
 city's railroads cover a relatively shorter distance than the previous
cities
, with the longest route in Washington at 126
kilometers
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kilometres
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,
while
 Kyoto and Los Angeles only
covering
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cover
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 11 and 26
kilometers
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kilometres
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.
Furthermore
, the
amount
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number
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 of
passengers
 they get in a
year
are
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is
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 significantly lower than
the
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in the
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three
 other
cities
 with 144, 45, and 50
passengers
 in Washington, Kyoto, and Los Angeles respectively.
To conclude
, the
amount
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number
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 of people and
distance
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distances
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 covered by railways built in 1976 to 2001 have
lower
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a lower
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 amount of
passengers
 a
year
 and cover shorter
distance
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distances
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 than railways built
in
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from
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 1863 to 1927.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words railway, cities, kilometers, year, three, passengers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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