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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given map demonstrates the changes
happened
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that happened
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 to the
road
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 which had
an
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apply
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access to the
city
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 hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
Overall
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, the significant change was the transportation system.
In addition
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, the roundabouts are located on the hospital
road
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 that had been constructed
along with
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 bus stations and car parks. First of all, in 2007 the hospital
road
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 was only connecting the
city
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road
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 with the
city
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 hospital.
However
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, in 2010 not only there was a roundabout in the north of the hospital
road
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 but
also
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 in its south part which connected it with the newly built bus station,
furthermore
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, the south roundabout connected the
city
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road
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 with the bus station .
Secondly
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, the car park included both the staff and public cars in 2007.
As a result
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 of that a new public car was built attached to the ring
road
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 and the original was now becoming exclusively for the staff only. In the east, meanwhile, there was a newly constructed roundabout.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic flow
  • road access
  • ring road
  • bus stops
  • bus station
  • congestion
  • parking facilities
  • pedestrian crossings
  • vehicular flow
  • organizational structure
  • accessibility
  • enhancements
  • configuration
  • dedicated
  • diverting traffic
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