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The graph below shows the average time spent by four car manufacturers to produce vehicles at their US factories.

The graph below shows the average time spent by four car manufacturers to produce vehicles at their US factories.
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The bar chart illustrates the average
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 spent by four certain
car
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 manufacturers to produce
vehicle
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 at their US factories, over a 7-year period, starting from 1998.
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, it can be seen that all four brands experienced a downward trend in the amount of ordinary
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 spent on producing a
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, witnessing General
Motor
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Motors
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 with the greatest dramatic fall. What
also
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stand
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 out from the chart is that Ford recorded the highest common
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was
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spent
for
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a
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car
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 manufacturing for almost the entire surveyed period, with the exception of the start and the end of the period when General
Motor
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 held the top spot. Among all the
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 brands, in first place was General
Motor
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, with 32
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 spent on finishing a
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, surpassing the figure for Ford by 4 units. At the bottom of the list came Toyota and Honda, sharing almost the same
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 of making one
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, at around 22
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.
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, the amount of usual
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 spent by General Motors on making a
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 decreased noticeably to 22
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 in 2005.
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, a plunge was observed in the amount of normal
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 spent by Ford on manufacturing each
car
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, reaching a low of just under 22
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. Toyota and Honda followed similar trends, but less pronounced, these countries shared the same figure in the final year, fluctuating mildly between 20
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 and 24
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, car, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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