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The advantages of English language as a global language will continue to outweigh the disadvantages to what extent do you agree or disagree

English
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 has escalated as an international
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 and the advantages keep on surpassing the disadvantages. In my opinion, I agree that
English
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 is a
language
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 spoken in most parts of the world.
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, I
also
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 believe that
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English
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language
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 has disadvantages when it comes to cultural differences in some
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 of the world. First and foremost,
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 is one form of the benefit of
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English
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language
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. The
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 when used internationally has a great way of
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 which helps other nationals to understand what others want to say or want from them.
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,
business oriented
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 people visiting other
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 to purchase goods
to
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 their customers, without basic knowledge
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language
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,
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 with their business partners will be difficult.
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, migration is
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 another benefit of
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language
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. Since human migration has become so popular recently
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language
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 is playing a very big role in a multicultural society for
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reasons
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. Most people travel for many reasons
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 as schooling, conferences, job opportunities and so on. For
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example,
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language
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 has become so popular in
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 a way that most
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 request
for
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an
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 examination before a visa is granted.
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do
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believe that
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 has a negative influence on culture. Some
countries
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has
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 made it a point to overlook cultural differences in other nationals that visit their
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 and positively
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impact
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 their beliefs through the learning of
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 as a necessary
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 for them to be in their country.
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, one needs to have knowledge in
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 for a work permit to be granted and by so doing potential skilled workers will be lost through
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 barriers. In conclusion,
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 is considered the
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 for
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 by some nations. I believe some people
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 accepted
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a
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 international
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whiles
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 others are still debating on it .
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English
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The English
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 helps attain personal and professional growth when one has the knowledge of it. It makes travelling, schooling and job opportunities become easier.

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task achievement
Your introduction clearly sets the stage for the essay and introduces the topic well. However, consider stating your position more explicitly. Instead of saying 'In my opinion, I agree that...', you could say 'I believe that...'.
coherence cohesion
To improve the logical structure, make sure your paragraphs transition smoothly. Use more linking words/phrases between sentences and paragraphs to enhance the flow of your essay.
task achievement
There are some grammatical errors and awkwardly phrased sentences that can make the essay difficult to read in places. Proofreading your essay or using grammar-check tools can help.
supported main points
Support your main points with more specific examples or evidence. For example, you mentioned that English helps in business and migration, but adding statistics or anecdotes could strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Your essay is well-organized with a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps readers understand your position easily.
task achievement
You have addressed both sides of the argument, showcasing a balanced view on the advantages and disadvantages of English as a global language.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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