Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternatives medicines and treatments instead of visiting the doctors. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Recent trends
suggests
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a decrease
of
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traditional doctoral consultations which have
otherwise
been replaced by alternate medications. Following the
increase
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costs of living and medical bills, many have opted towards
this
decision since it may appeal as the most optimal choice.
However
, it's not all sunshine and rainbows, the majority of
health
experts
have warned the public of
such
practice as it may contain unwanted complications towards our
health
.
Thus
, I believe the most coherent approach solution is to be cautious of these practices and it's
reccomended
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recommended
to avoid
this
approach at all costs. First and foremost, the majority of these alternative
treatments
have not been verified by
health
experts
and may pose
health
risks.
For instance
, most
treatments
require the patient to consume
medicine
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which are not usually required or produced by sketchy, unreliable pharmaceutical companies.
Moreover
, the consumption of these unneeded
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does more bad than it does good. Many are unaware of the potential side effects that come with the treatment since it's not personally prescribed by a professional leading to many patients experiencing nausea, headaches or other
health
risks. Many
on the contrary
,
however
, have argued a different view. They believe that regular doctor appointments have become costly in
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recent years. It has provided families coming from predominantly lower-income backgrounds the opportunity for basic necessities at a much lower cost.
Furthermore
, with the advent of technology, alternative medications and
treatments
have proved to be as or if not more effective than regular procedures since it's specifically made for the patient's sickness. Studies conducted by Oxford University have claimed that patients coming from both
end
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of the stick, recover at equal rates, so there would be no reason to attend a doctor's appointment if it produces equal results
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being much
affordable
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and convenient.
To conclude
, groups which support the use of alternative medications
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that it has provided numerous opportunities for healthcare and studies have shown the effects are
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similar to that of a regular doctor appointment.
However
, it does
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with its drawbacks, since it's not verified by
health
experts
since
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some
treatments
include unnecessary or
unreiiable
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unreliable
practices and
poses
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health
risks since it doesn't take
consideration
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of
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other factors which may result in
their
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complications of
health
. With all
this
in mind, I believe that the arguments supported by professionals outweigh the advantages of the contrary.
Hence
, I believe the logical solution is to take advice from
experts
and
to
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not partake in these practices.
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