The chart below shows the proportions of adults in Canada who own one car, two cars, more than two cars, or who do not own a car.

The chart below shows the proportions of adults in Canada who own one car, two cars, more than two cars, or who do not own a car.
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The pie chart shows the proportion of adult
car
owners, in Canada, in terms of how many
cars
they own.
Overall
,
it is clear that
most of the Canadian adult population
have
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has
show examples
ownership of
cars
;
however
, a majority of them only have one
car
. Over 50% of the people
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
have ownership of a single
car
, in Canada,
while
the percentage of people owning two
cars
is not greater than 25%. That being said, the figure for two
cars
is the second highest, right after the figure for one
car
. Moving on to the remaining 25% of the chart,
it
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apply
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belongs to
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
individuals who have no
cars
and three or more
cars
. It is evident from the chart that people owning more than two
cars
account for the lowest proportion,
of
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at
show examples
about 10%.
Finally
, approximately one-sixth of the adults in Canada do not have any
cars
of their own.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words car, cars with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Proportion
  • Percentage
  • Ownership
  • Trend
  • Urban
  • Rural
  • Public transportation
  • Environmental impact
  • Government policies
  • Subsidy
  • Electric cars
  • Cultural attitudes
  • Income level
  • Economic factors
  • Technological advancement
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