Your friend is about to celebrate a landmark birthday and would welcome suggestions as to how it should be celebrated. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • say what type of party should be held e.g. themed, fancy dress, black tie event • suggest a suitable venue • make recommendations as to entertainment e.g. DJ, jazz band

Dear Joseph,
Last
week I got an E-mail from you. In that
mail
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, you asked
some
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for some
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recommdations
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recommendations
about the
birthday
celebrations. Next month your
son
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first
birthday
is coming and you are planning to celebrate that party tremendously. Here, I give some suggestions.
Firstly
, all
party
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should
be conduct
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some competitions
then
only that event will make them happy for all participants. To illustrate,
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at my
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my
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cousins
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cousin's
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daughter's
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daughter
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daughter's
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birthday
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event
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events
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there was a puzzle competition
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was
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organized and prices
also
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awarded
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at
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two ago. Here, you can try to arrange dance
competition
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, because
this
make
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them enjoyable for all.
Secondly
, the best place to conduct
this
party is
hotel
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Maris
this
is a 3-star hotel and the first floor contains a large hall and it can
accommadate
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accommodate
more than one hundred
person
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at one time.
Moreover
, our company
had
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conducted
business
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meeting
last
year at
this
hotel
with
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the
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affordable rate.
Finally
, all parties typically conduct some music show, because
this
type
event
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can make the guests feel more relaxed and comfortable.
Hence
consider
this
can
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be possible to arrange
in
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your
son
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birthday
celebration. Kindly, consider my advice and I will come with my family. Best Regards Thomas.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea to improve clarity.
task achievement
Pay attention to grammatical accuracy and sentence structure to enhance readability.
task achievement
The letter has a friendly and welcoming tone, which is appropriate for writing to a friend.
coherence cohesion
The letter contains a clear greeting and closing, making it easy to follow the structure.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • milestone birthday
  • themed party
  • fancy dress
  • black-tie event
  • elegant
  • sophisticated
  • atmosphere
  • venue
  • rooftop
  • cozy
  • trendy
  • garden venue
  • DJ
  • live jazz band
  • interactive entertainment
  • photo booth
  • magician
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