Your friend is about to celebrate a landmark birthday and would welcome suggestions as to how it should be celebrated. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • say what type of party should be held e.g. themed, fancy dress, black tie event • suggest a suitable venue • make recommendations as to entertainment e.g. DJ, jazz band
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Dear Joseph,
Last
week I got an E-mail from you. In that mail
, you asked Correct your spelling
email
some
Change preposition
for some
recommdations
about the Correct your spelling
recommendations
birthday
celebrations. Next month your son
first Change noun form
son's
birthday
is coming and you are planning to celebrate that party tremendously. Here, I give some suggestions.
Firstly
, all party
should Fix the agreement mistake
parties
be conduct
some competitions Change the verb form
conduct
then
only that event will make them happy for all participants. To illustrate, Change preposition
at my
my
Change preposition
at my
cousins
Change to a genitive case
cousin's
cousins'
Change noun form
daughter's
daughter
Change noun form
daughter's
birthday
Fix the agreement mistake
event
events
there was a puzzle competition Fix the agreement mistake
event
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
was
organized and prices Correct subject-verb agreement
were
also
awarded Add a missing verb
were also
Change preposition
apply
at
two ago. Here, you can try to arrange dance Change preposition
apply
competition
, because Fix the agreement mistake
competitions
this
make
them enjoyable for all.
Change the verb form
makes
Secondly
, the best place to conduct this
party is hotel
Maris Capitalize word
Hotel
this
is a 3-star hotel and the first floor contains a large hall and it can accommadate
more than one hundred Correct your spelling
accommodate
person
at one time. Change to a plural noun
people
Moreover
, our company had
conducted Unnecessary verb
apply
business
meeting Add an article
a business
last
year at this
hotel with
Change preposition
at
the
affordable rate.
Correct article usage
an
Finally
, all parties typically conduct some music show, because this
type event
can make the guests feel more relaxed and comfortable. Change preposition
of event
Hence
consider this
can
be possible to arrange Verb problem
apply
in
your Change preposition
apply
son
Change noun form
son's
birthday
celebration. Kindly, consider my advice and I will come with my family.
Best Regards
Thomas.Submitted by smsundaram57 on
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea to improve clarity.
task achievement
Pay attention to grammatical accuracy and sentence structure to enhance readability.
task achievement
The letter has a friendly and welcoming tone, which is appropriate for writing to a friend.
coherence cohesion
The letter contains a clear greeting and closing, making it easy to follow the structure.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite