You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: describe what the group does explain why the group is good for the community suggest alternative days and times for practice

Dear Sir, I am writing
this
letter to request you
for using
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the
community
hall. My name is Harry and I am the one of musicians in our group, who are playing
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the violine
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violine
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violin
in the local
community
center
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.
Initially
, our group
contains
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twelve members and we
are
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have
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all practising
violene
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violence
in
this
community
center
since
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two years. Normally our practice
timing
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is 6.00 PM to 8.0PM on every
tuesday
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Tuesday
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and
friday
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Friday
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.
Last
week one of your
community
service staff told us there is no
class
to conduct from next week onwards
,
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because some NGO has planned to organize
dance
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a dance
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programme
in
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that same date and timing our musical
class
schedule.
To
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addition, as a
manager
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you know about our team. We are all conducting free
class
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for physically handicapped artists and
provinding
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providing
lot
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of funds to the organization.
Hence
, kindly consider our request and make some alternative
arrangement
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for us. If
no
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not
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possible, we can change our
class
schedule and time
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on your decision. Yours
truley
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truly
, Harry
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James
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task achievement
Make sure your response completely addresses all parts of the prompt. You covered the main points but more details could be added on why the group is beneficial for the community.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical structure of your letter by clearly organizing paragraphs and ensuring smooth transitions.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph should ideally contain a single idea to make it easier to read and understand.
task achievement
The letter maintains a polite and respectful tone throughout, which is appropriate for this context.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are correctly formatted and contribute to the overall clarity of the letter.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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