Some people think that manufacturers and shopping malls should sell fewer packaged products while others argue that pople have the responsibilty to buy products with less packaging. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Many individuals believe that packaged
products
should be sold less by manufacturers
and shopping malls, in contrast
, other people
dispute that it is necessary for people
's responsibilities when buying products
with less packaging. In my opinion, I entirely agree with the belief that we should buy products
which have less packaging for several reasons and also
discuss both advantages and disadvantages.
There are many possibility
that make the shopping alls or Change to a plural noun
possibilities
manufacturers
sell fewer packaged products
. One obvious issue is the big impact on the environment
. This
can lead to many disasters such
as drought, earthquakes
,.. by using nylon or plastic to package Correct word choice
and earthquakes
products
. This
is why many people
think about the idea that packaged products
should be less by the manufacturers
and shopping malls to improve the quality of habits. Furthermore
, reduce using these plastic things can cause more carbon dioxide and also
increase the amount of greenhouse gases which can be harmful to the environment
and people
's health.
On the other hand
, these problems is
not just caused by Change the verb form
are
manufacturers
or shopping malls but also
by humans. The first issue is that buying too many packaged products
are
affected by human desire so Correct subject-verb agreement
is
people
also
play an important role in a large number of packaged products
. What is more harmful, it also
does harm to people
's environment
and state, especially human's
health.
In conclusion, I strongly support the belief that Change noun form
human
people
should reduce the consumption of packaged products
due to
their responsibilities to protect both the environment
and health. It can improve the quality of the air and reduce the occurrence of disasters which can do harm to people
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task achievement
Clarify your arguments and avoid repetitive statements. For example, instead of repeating that packaged products harm the environment, elaborate on different types of packaging or alternative solutions.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical structure by ensuring each paragraph has a clear main idea and supporting details. Each paragraph should flow logically to the next.
task achievement
Use more specific examples to support your points. For instance, mention specific cases where reducing packaging has had a positive impact.
task achievement
The essay provides a clear stance and addresses both sides of the issue.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are both present and generally well-structured.