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Some people think that school education should be focused on a academic subjects which is beneficial for their future careers, as well as they consider subjects like music and sports to be useless. However, I think that music and sports are very important.

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Some people think that school education should be focused on
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academic subjects which
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 beneficial for their future careers,
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 they consider subjects like music and sports to be useless.
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, I think that music and sports are very important. The reason why weddings are more expensive in many countries today than before is because many people have financial problems. I think
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 problem is a negative development. Environmental problems
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pollution and climate change affect all the people in the world.
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 environmental problems are the solutions ineffective. But I believe that can these
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 be solved. In some countries, it’s very important for parents to educate their children at home.
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, a child educated on the street has a lower level of consciousness than a child educated at home.
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