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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. The chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. The chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household.
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The first pie chart illustrates the use of power for household purposes in
Australia
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 and the second pie chart displays how many greenhouse
gas
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emissions
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 from the usage of
this
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 power.
Overall
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, heating and
water
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 heating are the main purposes of energy use in
Australia
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. It can
also
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 be seen that
water
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 heating and other appliances contribute the most to
Australia
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's
gas
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emissions
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. The main reason Australians use the power is for heating, with 42%, followed by
water
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 heating, at 30%. Other appliances take part in 15% of the usage purpose. The other three reasons, which are refrigeration, lighting, and cooling, have less than a tenth for each, with 7%, 4%, and 2%, respectively.
This
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 energy left an effect
of
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on
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 greenhouse
gas
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emissions
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 in
Australia
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, in which
water
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 heating is the main cause of the emission and contributes to 32% of the total causes. The second main cause is other appliances, which gives 28%. Heating and refrigeration contribute 15% and 14% of
gas
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emissions
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, respectively. Lighting gives 8% to the total emission,
while
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 cooling only contributes 3%.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, gas, emissions, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • energy consumption
  • household
  • heating
  • water heating
  • total energy use
  • household appliances
  • refrigerator
  • washing machine
  • lighting
  • cooling
  • miscellaneous energy uses
  • average household
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