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The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph gives information about 3 types of
food
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 which Australian teenagers consumed between 1975 to 2000. Looking at the
overall
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 trend,
it is clear that
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fish
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 and
chips
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 declined over time
while
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pizza
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 and
hamburgers
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 were eaten increased.
To begin
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 with that, in 1975
fish
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 and
chips
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 were at the top of the consumed
food
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 100
times
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 eaten
whereas
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pizza
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 and
hamburgers
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starts
Wrong verb form
started
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 to appear. Next decade in 1985
hamburgers
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 was equaled amount with
food
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fish
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 and
chips
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 which consumed approximately 85
times
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 in the
year
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.
In addition
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.
pizza
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 began to grow and was eaten 30
times
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. In 1995, the number of eaten
hamburgers
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 was at the top of the list a little more than 100
times
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 per
a
Correct article usage
apply
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year
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, at the same time
pizza
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 was probably 85
times
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 per
year
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.
However
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,
food
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 which was popular in 1975, dropped and stayed at
last
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 on the list in 1995 with 50
times
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 eaten by teenagers and still falls. In 2000, the amount of fast
food
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 consumed by teenagers has not changed, but
fish
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 and
chips
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has
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have
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 reached no more than 40
times
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 per
year
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,
while
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 others averaged 90-92
times
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 per
year
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, fish, chips, pizza, hamburgers, times, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • trends
  • consumption
  • type of fast food
  • popularity
  • peaked
  • hit a low
  • timeline
  • notable
  • switch
  • cultural trends
  • economic factors
  • marketing efforts
  • increase
  • decrease
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