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The bar chart below shows the average duration of housework women did (unemployed, part-time employed, and full-time) when compared to men who had full-time work in the Peru between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the average duration of housework women did (unemployed, part-time employed, and full-time) when compared to men who had full-time work in the Peru between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart compares the duration of average
hours
 of household work between
women
 and men in
the
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Peru in a time span of 20 years from 1985 to 2005.
Overall
, it is evident that unemployed
women
 did the most
of
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work and men did the least work in a given time frame. In 1985, Unemployed
women
 worked for 7
hours
everyday
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;
wherears
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whereas
, in 1995
there
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their
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hours
 decreased a bit and were at around 6.5
hours
.
Moreover
, in 2005
there
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their
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hours
 went back to 7 again.
However
,
women
 working part-time were doing just above 5
hours
 each day in 1985, which
was
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declined to 5
hours
 in 1995 before reaching
to
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6
hours
 in 2005.
In contrast
, the average
hours
 of
women
 who were working full-time in 1985 was very
less
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 and was only 2
hours
, but
then
 it increased in 2005 to just under 3
hours
.
In addition
,
men's
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men
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 employed full-time
had
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worked 1 hour in both 1985 and 1995;
whereas
,
hours
 increased slightly to approximately 1.5
hours
 in 2005.
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