The chart below gives information about how people aged 25-34 are housed in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting on the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how people aged 25-34 are housed in the UK. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting on the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart shows data about how
avarage
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average
people from 25 to 34 years old are housed in the UK.
According to
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the chart,
percentages
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of homeowners tend to fall after each
year
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,
while
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the number of renters slowly
increase
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increases
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. In 2004, the amount of homeowners
take
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was
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up to almost 60%
as
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at
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the highest rate and in 2014, it
drop
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dropped
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to about 35%.
Year
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2005 to 2007
holds
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hold
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a
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apply
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steady
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percentages
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percentage
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at about 55% of homeowners throughout
UK
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the UK
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then
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the
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percentages
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percentage
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consistently fall and
fluctuates
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fluctuate
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between the
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year
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years
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2011 to 2013. In comparison,
while
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the amount of homeownership
has
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apply
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reached
it’s
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its
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highest peak in 2004,
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the percentages
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percentages
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percentage
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of rental
property
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properties
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was at
it’s
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its
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lowest – at about 20%.
Similar
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Similarly
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to
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apply
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that
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apply
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, in 2014, renter
citizen
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citizens
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of
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in
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the UK
has
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apply
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went up to nearly 30%. From
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the year
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year
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years
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2003 to 2006 and between 2007 and 2008, there
were
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was
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little or almost no change in
renter
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the renter
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population; other than that, the
percentages
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for renters
changes
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changed
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a bit
through
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apply
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each
year
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but
it
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they
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still stably
rise
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rose
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Contractions: Don't use contractions.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentages, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographics
  • housing tenure
  • private rental sector
  • homeownership
  • social housing
  • geographical variations
  • urban vs. rural
  • trend analysis
  • percentage
  • significant
  • proportion
  • illustrates
  • noticeable trends
  • comparisons
  • conclude
  • summarize
  • main features
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