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Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words. You have now reached the end of your Writing test; download the answers and see how well you have done.

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Whilst some caregivers think that home
education
 is better for
children
 as they give more attention
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 their
children
more
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than regular schools,others think that regular
education
 can be more
benificial
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beneficial
 for learners.
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 my humble opinion ,
i
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 think regular teaching
method
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methods
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 are better
on
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 many ways
specially
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 on social levels. On one hand,some
parents
thinks
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 that protecting their
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offspring
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offsprings
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 through avoiding interacting with students who can change their
children
's
behaviour
 and their
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attitude
attiude
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attitude
.
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for
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 instance,shy
childrens
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children
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 after going to
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school
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schools
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school
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,
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they
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 develop
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aggressive
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attitude
attiude
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attitude
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for
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sometimes and their change in
behaviour
 can
last
 for years.What can be said is that aggressive
behaviour
 that learners can develop through interacting with each
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 can be the reason for
parents
 to avoid regular
schools pathway
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school pathways
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.
On the other hand
,most caregivers
perfer
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prefer
traditional
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the traditional
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 way of
education
 as it
develop
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 a lot of social
behaviour
experience
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experiences
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 for their
offsprings
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 that they can not meet
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 home.
Thus
,most
parents
 push their
children
 to go to school to learn subjects
as well as
behaviour
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 traits.An example
for
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 that,
learners
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is learners
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 at school develop a way of interacting with each
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 and
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 circles and they can meet friends.
Such
 traits are
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priceless
 and hardly to find these traits in
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 pupils.
Finally
,after reviewing both ideas that people may have towards both
self
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education
 and traditional way of
education
,I can easily say that with some guidance and
carefull
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careful
carefully
 teaching
methods
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 teachers can easily change all
educators
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educator's
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behaviour
 to get
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positive
 outcomes.
Thus
,no need for
parents
 to educate their
children
on
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homes
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home
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 as
students
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student
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 interaction is very
crutial
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crucial
critical
specially
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 when it comes to shaping their behaviours.
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task achievement
You have addressed the task and given some advantages for both methods of education. However, make sure to elaborate more on both sides to provide a complete perspective.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. You have also presented your opinion. Ensure each paragraph is well-developed with more supporting details and examples.
presentation
Pay attention to your grammar and sentence structure to improve clarity. Also, ensure to check for spelling and punctuation errors to make your argument more persuasive.
coherence cohesion
It's great that you clearly stated your opinion in the introduction and conclusion!
task achievement
Your essay demonstrates an awareness of the importance of social interactions in traditional schooling.
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