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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The line chart delineates the data on the total number of shops opened and closed in a particular country from the
year
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 2011 to the
year
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 2018.
Overall
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, the graph illustrates high variance throughout the given period. In the
year
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 2015, the chart showed a dramatic drop.
Nevertheless
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, in 2013 it reached its peak.
To begin
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 with,In the
year
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 2011, the number of shops opened was 8,500, it fell to half the amount in the following
year
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. It
then
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 soared to 5,000 in 2013 and 6,000 in 2014 respectively.
However
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, it dropped to 4,000 in the next
year
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 and levelled off for the next consecutive 2 years and by the end of 2018, it reached 3,000.
On the other hand
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, in the beginning of 2011, the total count of shops closed was 6,500 but it reduced to 6,000 in the
year
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 2012, reaching the highest of 7000 in the
year
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 2013. From 2014, the graph dropped to 6,000 and from there to 500.
This
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year
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 the country met with the lowest number of shop closures.
Nonetheless
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, the graph rose to 5000 and hovered for the next 3 years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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