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You recently moved to a new house and you want to invite an old friend to stay with you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, -Invite him to stay and suggest a date -briefly describe the new house and garden -say why you like your new house.

#house #friend #-invite #date #garden #-say
Dear Amanda, I hope
this
 letter finds you in excellent health and you are doing well over there, for
long
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 time no seen you since we finished our studies in senior high school 2 years ago, I really miss you, girl. I am writing
this
 email to inform you that I have recently
move
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 to
new
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a new
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 house, and
the
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it the
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 located near
from
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your city. First of all, I am going to describe my cottage to you.
This
 place is great because have
a
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complete facilities
such
 as
big
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a big
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 garage,
stunning
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a stunning
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 view, and
also
 have
swimming
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a swimming
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 pool in the backyard.
Moreover
, there
have
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 a good neighborhood.
In addition
, I love
this
 flat
as
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for several reasons.
Firstly
, it
near
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is near
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 with a lot of public
fasilities
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facilities
 like a Mall,
education
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an education
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 facility and
have
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has
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delighful
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delicious
 transportation.
Secondly
,
cost
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the cost
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live
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of living
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 here is really
friendly
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high
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 it is helpful for me as a young generation to
saving numerous
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 money. Once again, If you have
a
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 free time
in
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this
 weekend I want to invite you
come
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 to my house we will conduct a private party to celebrate
this
 moment. I looking forward to hearing from you soon. yours sincerely, Bayu sab.
Submitted by patricius.yohanes on

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coherence and cohesion
Try to maintain a clear logical flow in your letter. Ensure each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. Each paragraph should contain a single main idea, and a logical order of ideas should be clear to the reader.
coherence and cohesion
Work on sentence structure and grammar to improve clarity and readability. Also, make sure there's consistency in verb tenses and subject-verb agreement.
task achievement
Ensure your response is more comprehensive and provides all necessary details. For example, the date for the invitation should be clearly stated.
task achievement
You have done a good job of addressing the points requested in the prompt, such as describing the new house and expressing your reasons for liking it.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are polite and friendly, which creates a warm tone suitable for the letter.
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