You and some friends want to start a weekly dance club and you have found a hall that would be suitable to hold your meetings. Write a letter to the owner of the hall. In you letter, 1. explain your and your friends project 2. ask if it possible to rent the hall and under the what terms 3. state what day and what timings you would like to use the hall
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am Harpreet and I am a professional
dance
teacher. I am writing this
letter to propose a collaborative project with your hall as I and my friends desire to initiate a weekly dance
club.
Fortunately, I received a
award for my Change the article
an
dance
skills last
week from Scared University. Now I would like to open a weekly dance
club to promote physical fitness along with
social interaction. Can you please let me know if it is available or not to rent? If I get your approval, I will start online and walk-in registration on 27th June,
2024 from 10am to 5pm at your hall.
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Also
, we will discuss the availability of time whether
it fits well in your existing schedule or not. Correct word choice
and whether
Moreover
, I assure you that there will be no conflict with other events.
I look forward for
a positive response. I appreciate your time and consideration. Do not hesitate to contact me if you need any Change preposition
to
further
information.
Yours faithfully,
HarpreetSubmitted by krnveerrsingh on
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coherence cohesion
While the letter is generally clear, it would benefit from a more logical structure to improve readability. Consider organizing your ideas into distinct paragraphs to avoid mixing points.
suitable writing tone
Make sure the tone remains formal throughout the letter. Some phrases can be slightly more formal to match the overall style.
task achievement
The letter adequately covers all the required points: explaining the project, asking about the rental, and specifying the desired day and times.
suitable writing tone
The tone is polite and professional, making it suitable for a formal letter.
The Greeting
Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.
Always start an informal letter in the ways:
- Dear + name
- Hi / Hello + name
‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.
For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:
- Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
- Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.