Some species of animals are almost extinct; and many others seem to be fast approaching a similar risk. What are the reasons for this? What should be done to solve this problem?
Nowadays, some wild animals are extinct
while
others are close to the same end. There is a spefic
reason which has Correct your spelling
specific
been
caused Unnecessary verb
apply
this
situation, but there is also
a solution. In this
essay, I will explain both.
The main reason why many animals are extinct is because of global warming. This
phenomenon is caused by CO2, when there is too
CO2 under the stratosphere, the Replace the word
to
earth
temperature Change noun form
earth's
is getting
higher and the globe Wrong verb form
gets
is starting
to be toxic for the Wrong verb form
starts
enevironment
and animals that are living in it. Correct your spelling
environment
For example
, white
polar bear is Add an article
the white
a white
a
animal specie from Change the article
an
Antartic
, where usually they Correct your spelling
Antarctica
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are use
to Change the verb form
are used
are using
live
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living
with
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in
temperature
under 0 degrees. Fix the agreement mistake
temperatures
Instead
, due to
global warming they are suffering because of high degrees.
This
earth
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earth's
have
just one solution and it is to reduce CO2 Change the verb form
has
emission
. In order to do Fix the agreement mistake
emissions
this
, people all around the world have to collaborate on this
process. For instance
, one of the most impact cause
is CO2 emission from Fix the agreement mistake
causes
people
vehicles Change noun form
people's
such
as cars. Individuals could try to minimize the roads
traffic and try to use more public transport, Change the noun form
road
thus
in this
way, less
vehicles, Change the quantifier
fewer
less
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fewer
emissons
.
In conclusion, cars and white polar bears are so different things but thanks to Correct your spelling
emissions
this
case it is easy to see how simple it is to destroy an animal specie
apparently so far from humans and civil society. If every person can Fix the agreement mistake
species
do
a small part in Verb problem
play
this
process, one day this
world will be better than now.Submitted by bucciarellianna3 on
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coherence cohesion
To improve the logical structure, ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main idea and builds upon it logically.
task achievement
Enhance the support for your main points by providing more specific details and examples, beyond the polar bear example.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which frame your argument well.
task achievement
You addressed both parts of the task, explaining the reason for animal extinction and proposing a solution.
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