Some species of animals are almost extinct; and many others seem to be fast approaching a similar risk. What are the reasons for this? What should be done to solve this problem?

#species #animals #risk

Nowadays, some wild animals are extinct

while

others are close to the same end. There is a

spefic

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specific

reason which has

been

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caused

this

situation, but there is

also

a solution. In

this

essay, I will explain both. The main reason why many animals are extinct is because of global warming.

This

phenomenon is caused by CO2, when there is

too

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CO2 under the stratosphere, the

earth

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temperature

is getting

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higher and the globe

is starting

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to be toxic for the

enevironment

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environment

and animals that are living in it.

For example

white

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the white

a white

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polar bear is

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animal specie from

Antartic

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Antarctica

Antarctic

, where usually they

are use

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are used

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live

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with

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temperature

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temperatures

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under 0 degrees.

Instead

due to

global warming they are suffering because of high degrees.

This

earth

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situation

have

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just one solution and it is to reduce CO2

emission

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. In order to do

this

, people all around the world have to collaborate on

this

process.

For instance

, one of the most impact

cause

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causes

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is CO2 emission from

people

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vehicles

such

as cars. Individuals could try to minimize the

roads

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traffic and try to use more public transport,

thus

this

way,

less

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vehicles,

less

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emissons

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emissions

. In conclusion, cars and white polar bears are so different things but thanks to

this

case it is easy to see how simple it is to destroy an animal

specie

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apparently so far from humans and civil society. If every person can

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a small part in

this

process, one day

this

world will be better than now.

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Enhance the support for your main points by providing more specific details and examples, beyond the polar bear example.

coherence cohesion

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task achievement

You addressed both parts of the task, explaining the reason for animal extinction and proposing a solution.

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9Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
25Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

252 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

species extinction
endangered animals
biodiversity
habitat loss
deforestation
urbanization
poaching
illegal wildlife trade
climate change
pollution
conservation efforts
legislation
enforcement
human overpopulation
sustainable development
responsible consumption
education
awareness programs
protected areas
wildlife reserves
international cooperation
collaboration

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Some species of animals are almost extinct; and many others seem to be fast approaching a similar risk. What are the reasons for this? What should be done to solve this problem?

Your opinion

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Many employees can now do their work from home using modern technology. However, this change may only benefit workers, not the employers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

More and more people are shifting to a plant-based diet. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Some people think that it is better for high school students to study a wide range of subjects than to focus on a narrow range of subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many people say that providing access to clean water should be the main focus for international aid organizations. Others say that there are more important uses for international aid. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+