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The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The data shows how
forgiens
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foreign
 occupy their vacation . in
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 I will discuss precisely how tourists plan their getaway , And how it impacts their holiday .
Overall
 , the chart
examens
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examines
 the
precentage
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percentage
 of individuals around the world that are in Australia . It includes 4 main countries that are Asia , Europe ,
United
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 States , And other countries . we can see that the
Majority
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 of tourists are
Europian
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European
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 and
asians
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Asian
. To
begain
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begin
 with , American and
Europian
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European
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 people spent approximately 14 to 16 days
respectivly
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respectively
,which indicates the reason behind staying in low
rates
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 star hotels or even camping ,
becasue
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because
 of the high cost
for
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 spending a long
legnth
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length
 of staying ,
while
 Asians stay fewer days ,
therefore
 they in high rating hotels which they can
efford
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afford
.
on the other hand
 , for the
activites
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activities
,
asians
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Asian
 and
american
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American
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 individuals love sightseeing , because it reminds them of their hometown , and
for
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 europian and other regions they enjoy more of a
high intensity
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activties
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activities
such
 as
surffing
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surfing
 or swimming .
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • comparison
  • spike
  • drop
  • correlation
  • seasonal variation
  • demographics
  • tourist influx
  • resort
  • holidaymakers
  • visitor statistics
  • notable changes
  • fluctuation
  • steady growth
  • decline
  • peak season
  • off-peak season
  • international tourists
  • domestic tourists
  • external factors
  • economic conditions
  • political climate
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