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The table below shows local catches and imports of fresh fish into Perth, Australia for the years 2004 - 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows local catches and imports of fresh fish into Perth, Australia for the years 2004 - 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart depicts the changes in local fishing and imports of fresh
fish
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, measured in metric
tons
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, into Perth, Australia within the year from 2004 to 2014.
Overall
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, the total of fresh
fish
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 available in the said area increased within the 10 years with a large contribution from local fishing. In the first 5 years, fresh
fish
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 available in Perth, Australia showed a gradual rise. Around 3142 metric
tons
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 of
fish
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 from both local and foreign areas were recorded in 2004. The amount of fresh
fish
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 peaked in 2009
with
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 8969 metric
tons
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.
In contrast
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, the data from the following years saw a declining trend, as fresh
fish
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 in 2010 decreased by around 900 metric
tons
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 from 2009. The total amount of fresh
fish
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 gradually decreases each year and levelled off at approximately 5814 metric
tons
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.
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, data on local fishing and foreign from 2009 to 2014 showed a fluctuation.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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