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The table below shows the number of motor vehicles per 1,000 inhabitants in eight countries in 1990 and 2000.

The table below shows the number of motor vehicles per 1,000 inhabitants in eight countries in 1990 and 2000.
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The examined chart illustrates and gives information about the
data
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 vehicle ownerships per a thousand citizens in eight countries between 1990 and 2000.
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, there was an increase in the number of motor
vehicles
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 in six countries, with the volume of Brazil and Romania
vehicles
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 witnessing the most noticeable growth.
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, the figure for the owned motor
vehicles
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 in
Bahamas
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the Bahamas
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 experienced a drop;
meanwhile
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 Cambodia
data
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 maintained the same. The figure for Brazil and Romania
transportations
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transportation
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 started at 55 and 68 in 1990, after which it rose significantly to reach the final
data
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 at 13580 and 8012 in 2000.
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, the number of Bahamas
vehicles
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 owned by occupants was
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exceptional
data
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 that was considered a gradual decline. Simultaneously, the figure for Cambodia started at 1 and
leveled
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 off towards the end of the period. 68 and 531 were the number of transportations per thousand of citizens in Chile and New Zealand, which witnessed a similar slight rise to 88 and 557 in 2000. Resemble changes, but to greater extents, were seen in the figures for
vehicles
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 in Jordan and Luxembourg,
started
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 at 50 and 548, followed by a remarkable climb to 157 and 728 in the
last
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 year.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words data, vehicles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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