Due to the availability of fast food nowadays, many people have low-quality diets. What problems can this cause? What can governments do to resolve these problems? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
In the present, fast
foods
can be easier accessible than the
past. Most humans have consumer behavior causing a variety of problems. Change preposition
in the
This
writing will discuss three issues which are suffering from obesity, lack of nutrition and rubbish packages.
Firstly
, certainly, fats are
more disadvantages than advantages in Verb problem
have
medical
. Replace the word
medicine
People
become obese where
consume junk Correct word choice
when
foods
too much because of a lot of fats. As a result
, health conditions may occur such
as increment visceral fat of other diseases. Secondly
, fast foods
consist of grease, meats and a few vegetables. Hence
, people
may get inadequate nutritions
. The more you eat them, the less nutrients you have. Fix the agreement mistake
nutrition
Lastly
, the
packages Change the word
their
of
Change preposition
apply
them
contribute to environmental problems. Correct pronoun usage
apply
For example
, dumping containers into public areas can contaminate biodiversity. Then
, if people
consumed animals from that environment, it would return toxic chemicals to their bodies.
In order to solve these problems, governments should introduce policies to deal with them. To begin
with, imposing high tariffs is necessary to impede people
who access that
Change the determiner
that food
those foods
foods
easily. Next,
providing free healthy food at schools or companies can help children and adults to get appropriate meals. Finally
, introducing a reward system at food shops will stimulate people
to have great quality behavior
. Change the spelling
behaviour
For instance
, they can offer coupons for discounts.
To summarize, there are many solutions to clarify these issues. Whatever
, increasing tax rates, free healthy diets or an award system. Correct word choice
Whether
However
, everythings
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that is
told in this
essay might cooperate between every section of working in order to have the best efficientcy
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efficiency
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clarity
Work on your sentence structure and grammar to ensure clarity and reduce ambiguity. For example, 'In the present, fast foods can be easier accessible than the past' should be 'Nowadays, fast foods are more easily accessible than in the past.'
examples
Expand on your points with more specific examples to better illustrate your arguments. Your suggestions for government actions are good, but they need specific, relevant examples. For example, mention countries that have successfully implemented high tariffs on fast foods or schools that offer nutritious meals.
coherence
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and supporting sentences. For example, in the second paragraph, explicitly link how fast foods lead to lack of nutrition. Strengthening the connections between sentences will enhance coherence.
task response
You have addressed all parts of the task by discussing both problems and potential solutions.
structure
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which help frame your arguments well.
content
You provided several good points about the health, nutritional, and environmental issues associated with fast food consumption.
Your opinion
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