The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table above shows the region of the
tourists
in Australia and the table shows the difference between the regions of the
tourists
. The chart shows that the most
tourists
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came
camed
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come
from both Asia and Europe and that there is only 28
percent
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per cent
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of
people
traveled
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travelled
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from
US
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the US
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and other countries The table describes the
tourists
by the length of stay ,
were
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where
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they stay and
there
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their
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main activities, the Asian
tourists
at
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on
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average
they
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apply
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stay
7
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for 7
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days
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however
the European
people
stays
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stay
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for 16 days and the American
tourists
stays
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for 14 days ,
also
the European and
the
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apply
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other countries
people
stays
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stay
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at camps or
caravan
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caravans
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but both Asian and American
tourists
prefer to stay at hotels,the Asian and American
tourists
love sightseeing but the European and the
people
from other regions usually like to do the sea activities . In conclusion
the
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most
of
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tourists
are from Asia and Europe
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • comparison
  • spike
  • drop
  • correlation
  • seasonal variation
  • demographics
  • tourist influx
  • resort
  • holidaymakers
  • visitor statistics
  • notable changes
  • fluctuation
  • steady growth
  • decline
  • peak season
  • off-peak season
  • international tourists
  • domestic tourists
  • external factors
  • economic conditions
  • political climate
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