The table below presents the numbe of children ever born to women aged 40-44 years in Australia for each year the information was collected since 1981.

The table below presents the numbe of children ever born to women aged 40-44 years in Australia for each year the information was collected since 1981.
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The table describes the proportion of
children
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born to women between the ages of 40 and 44, in Australia. The survey was done four times, from the year 1981 to 2006.
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it is clear that
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having three more
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has reduced substantially over the period.
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the percentage
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of birthing two
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remained the highest in all four years. In 1981, 27.6% of women gave birth to more than three
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in the next 15 years, the figure halved, and eventually dropped to 11%, by 2006.
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the decline for three
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was not as drastic as four or more
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, the proportion fell from 27.4% (in 1981) to 21.5% (in 2006.) The percentage of mothers who birthed two
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29%, in 1981.
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figure rose to 35.6% in the next five years, after which it stayed the same, in 1996 and 2006, at about 38%. The figure for one and no
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, in the given timeframe, almost doubled from their initial value, from 8.5% to 15.9% and 7.6% to 13.2%, respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words children with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gave" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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