The table below presents the numbe of children ever born to women aged 40-44 years in Australia for each year the information was collected since 1981.

The table below presents the numbe of children ever born to women aged 40-44 years in Australia for each year the information was collected since 1981.
The table describes the proportion of
children
born to women between the ages of 40 and 44, in Australia. The survey was done four times, from the year 1981 to 2006.
Overall
,
it is clear that
having three more
children
has reduced substantially over the period.
However
,
percentage
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the percentage
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of birthing two
children
remained the highest in all four years. In 1981, 27.6% of women gave birth to more than three
children
;
however
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in the next 15 years, the figure halved, and eventually dropped to 11%, by 2006.
Although
the decline for three
children
was not as drastic as four or more
children
, the proportion fell from 27.4% (in 1981) to 21.5% (in 2006.) The percentage of mothers who birthed two
children
was
at
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29%, in 1981.
Subsequently
,
this
figure rose to 35.6% in the next five years, after which it stayed the same, in 1996 and 2006, at about 38%. The figure for one and no
children
, in the given timeframe, almost doubled from their initial value, from 8.5% to 15.9% and 7.6% to 13.2%, respectively.
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