Some people think that new houses should be built in the same style as older houses in the local area. Others disagree and say that local authorities should allow people to build houses in the styles of their own choice. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Some
people
argue that the new homes
should be built as
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in
old
Correct article usage
the old
style
,while
others think that the houses
should be built according to
people
choice . Change noun form
people's
Although
people
prefer older houses
because all houses
looks
similar and Change the verb form
look
people
do not feel jealous among
each other ,Change preposition
of
but
nowadays if anyone wants to customize their Remove the conjunction
apply
house
according to
their needs then
it would be great for
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in
long
run.
On the one hand , Add an article
the long
people
prefer to live in Correct article usage
an old
old
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old-style
style
house
because they believe that Correct article usage
an old
old
Add a hyphen
old-style
style
house
has more space outside in order to organise any kind of small gatherings . Beside
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Besides
this
, if all men and women have similar homes
then
they feel equal among each other . For example
, in Canada ,Ontario
most of the Correct word choice
and Ontario
homes
look similar and it would be easy for people
to buy houses
because they have to look into
inside Change preposition
apply
of
the Change preposition
apply
home
in order to make decision
. Add an article
a decision
the decision
However
, I believe people
should built
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build
be built
houses
according to
themselves because they are the owner of the house
and make according to
them.
On the other hand
, It is thought that people
should build their houses
according to
their choices which I believe is the best choice for the long run because it took
a long time to build Wrong verb form
takes
Correct article usage
a
the
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a
house
and they have so many preferences according to
their kids so they do not want to move to another house
.Therefore
, they prefer to build the house
according to
their needs . For example
, Many houses
in British Columbia are built according to
home owner
needs because they would like to feel like a Correct your spelling
homeowner
home
and want to stay for long
period . Add an article
a long
Therefore
, I believe the people
needs
to Change the verb form
need
built
the Change the verb
build
house
according to
their satisfaction.
In conclusion, some argued
that new Wrong verb form
argue
houses
should be built as old
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old-style
style
homes
,where as
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whereas
,
others state that it Remove the comma
apply
depend
on Change the verb form
depends
people
choices to build Change noun form
people's
the
new Correct article usage
apply
houses
. There is no doubt people
like old
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old-style
style
homes
in which more space Add a missing verb
is availaible
availaible
for gatherings and easy to sell too. Correct your spelling
available
However
, new houses
should be built on the basis of home owner
needs .Correct your spelling
homeowner
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