In many places, new homes are needed , but the only space available for building them is in the country side. Some people beleive it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?
it
is argue
that Change the verb form
is argued
due to
population increase new residences are required , but countryside
is Add an article
the countryside
only
Correct article usage
the only
our
Correct pronoun usage
apply
availiblity
, Correct your spelling
availability
however
some people have any idea that the protection of Add a comma
however,
this
area is more vital and new house
should be built somewhere else. I Fix the agreement mistake
houses
beleive
that Correct your spelling
believe
Correct article usage
the counrtyside
counrtyside
should be preserved in order to conserve Correct your spelling
countryside
animals
habitat and less Change noun form
animals'
animal's
airpollution
.
the environment and natural resources have been already Correct your spelling
air pollution
dameged
by Correct your spelling
damaged
humans
activity and lack of knowledge about the importance of wildlife . new city and technology is a result of destroying nature Change the noun form
human
for having
new space for more Change preposition
to have
popullation
. Correct your spelling
population
therefore
, we should not damage more and more . however
it is understandable that Add a comma
however,
new
place for living is Correct article usage
a new
demand
for Correct article usage
a demand
the
population growth but Correct article usage
apply
demolition
of Correct article usage
the demolition
countryside
for Add an article
the countryside
new
house can contribute to air pollution and the extinction of local animals, which are living Add an article
a new
particulary
in Correct your spelling
particularly
this
part . Furthermore
Add a comma
Furthermore,
this
consequences affect Change the determiner
these
on
human Change preposition
apply
s
life because our life is connected with nature.
another point to consider is that damaging Change preposition
apply
countryside
for construction is a temporary solution , which can only Correct article usage
the countryside
hurts
our condition . Change the verb form
hurt
moreover
, there is
a several empty and useless places in Verb problem
apply
city
, Add an article
the city
where
are useful for building new homes for residents. Correct word choice
which
however
the management in Add a comma
however,
this
case is pivotal. in addition
, the
old houses are an outstanding Correct article usage
apply
opitions
for Correct your spelling
option
options
space
problem. Correct article usage
the space
in other words
, we can rebuild new places and renovate this
places for new and suitable Correct determiner usage
these
appartment
or Correct your spelling
apartments
skyscraper
.
in conclusion, lack of space is a crucial issue but in my opinion Fix the agreement mistake
skyscrapers
countryside
should be preserved Correct article usage
the countryside
due to
its effects on our life.Submitted by yasaman.bozorgzad9 on
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task achievement
The essay addresses the prompt and discusses both sides of the argument, but the response could be more thoroughly developed. Consider expanding on your points and providing more specific examples to demonstrate your arguments.
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The logical structure of the essay is adequate but could be clearer with more distinct paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on a single main idea and start with a clear topic sentence.
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More specific examples relevant to the topic would strengthen the essay. Try to provide real-world instances or more detailed scenarios to support your arguments.
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The essay presents a clear opinion and maintains it consistently throughout the text.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present and effectively frame the essay's main points.