In many places, new homes are needed , but the only space available for building them is in the country side. Some people beleive it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

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is argue
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that
due to
population increase new residences are required , but
countryside
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availiblity
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some people have any idea that the protection of
this
area is more vital and new
house
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should be built somewhere else. I
beleive
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believe
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the counrtyside
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counrtyside
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countryside
should be preserved in order to conserve
animals
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habitat and less
airpollution
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air pollution
. the environment and natural resources have been already
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damaged
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humans
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activity and lack of knowledge about the importance of wildlife . new city and technology is a result of destroying nature
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new space for more
popullation
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population
.
therefore
, we should not damage more and more .
however
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it is understandable that
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place for living is
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for
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population growth but
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of
countryside
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for
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house can contribute to air pollution and the extinction of local animals, which are living
particulary
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particularly
in
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part .
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this
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consequences affect
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human
s
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life because our life is connected with nature. another point to consider is that damaging
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for construction is a temporary solution , which can only
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our condition .
moreover
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a several empty and useless places in
city
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,
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are useful for building new homes for residents.
however
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the management in
this
case is pivotal.
in addition
,
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old houses are an outstanding
opitions
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option
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problem.
in other words
, we can rebuild new places and renovate
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places for new and suitable
appartment
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apartments
or
skyscraper
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. in conclusion, lack of space is a crucial issue but in my opinion
countryside
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should be preserved
due to
its effects on our life.
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The essay addresses the prompt and discusses both sides of the argument, but the response could be more thoroughly developed. Consider expanding on your points and providing more specific examples to demonstrate your arguments.
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More specific examples relevant to the topic would strengthen the essay. Try to provide real-world instances or more detailed scenarios to support your arguments.
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The essay presents a clear opinion and maintains it consistently throughout the text.
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