The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.
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The table shows data about the underground rail networks in six major cities. It compares the six networks in terms of their age, size and the number of people who use them each year.
It is clear that
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the three oldest underground
systems
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are larger and serve significantly more
passengers
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than the newer
systems
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. The London Underground is the oldest
system
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, having opened in 1863. It is
also
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the largest
system
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, with 394
kilometres
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of route. The second largest
system
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, in Paris, is only about half the size of the London underground, with 199
kilometres
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of route.
However
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, it serves more people per year.
While
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the Tokyo
system
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is only third in size, it is the most easily used, with 1927 million
passengers
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annually. Of the three newer networks, the Washington DC underground is the most extensive, with 126
kilometres
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of route, compared to only 11
kilometres
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and 28
kilometres
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for the Kyoto and Los Angeles
systems
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. The Los Angeles network is the newest, having opened in 2001,
while
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the Kyoto network is the smallest and serves only 45 million
passengers
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per year. In short, the latest railway
systems
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serve fewer
passengers
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than the oldest,
due to
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the large gap between the
kilometres
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of their routes.
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