The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.
The table shows data about the underground rail networks in six major cities. It compares the six networks in terms of their age, size and the number of people who use them each year.
It is clear that
the three oldest underground
systems
are larger and serve significantly more
passengers
than the newer
systems
. The London Underground is the oldest
system
, having opened in 1863. It is
also
the largest
system
, with 394
kilometres
of route. The second largest
system
, in Paris, is only about half the size of the London underground, with 199
kilometres
of route.
However
, it serves more people per year.
While
the Tokyo
system
is only third in size, it is the most easily used, with 1927 million
passengers
annually. Of the three newer networks, the Washington DC underground is the most extensive, with 126
kilometres
of route, compared to only 11
kilometres
and 28
kilometres
for the Kyoto and Los Angeles
systems
. The Los Angeles network is the newest, having opened in 2001,
while
the Kyoto network is the smallest and serves only 45 million
passengers
per year. In short, the latest railway
systems
serve fewer
passengers
than the oldest,
due to
the large gap between the
kilometres
of their routes.
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