The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The line chart provides information on the
number
of overseas
visitors
, visiting three different
areas
in a European country. These
areas
including
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include
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,
coast
Correct article usage
the coast
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, lakes, and
mountins
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mountains
. Throughout the period 1987 to 2007.
Overall
, it is evident that
coast
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coastal
show examples
areas
has
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have
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been the most
atractive
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attractive
destinations
throughout the periods, attracting
considerable
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a considerable
the considerable
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number
of
visitors
in comparison to other
destinations
. In 1987,
coast
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coastal
show examples
sites demonstrated a dominating trend, attracting
large
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a large
the large
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number
of
visitors
during the years, peaking at 70
thousands
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thousand
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visitors
, before a minor drop
happend
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happened
in 1992.
Similarly
,
mountians
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mountains
areas
, where it displayed an upward trend, starting with only 20
thousands
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thousand
show examples
visitors
and steadily increasing to nearly 35
thousands
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thousand
show examples
.
However
,
lakes
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lake
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destinations
saw
a
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apply
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various variations during the years,
initiating
Verb problem
starting
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with just 10
thousands
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thousands of
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visitors
,
this
number
saw a sharp increase peaking at 40
thousands
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thousand
show examples
, following that year the
number
started to gradually increase reaching 70
thousands
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thousand
show examples
.
Nevertheless
, the
number
significantly fall to 50
thousands
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thousand
show examples
. In summary, it is worth noting that by 2002
coast
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coastal
show examples
areas
represent
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represented
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the most attractive
destinations
,
following
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followed
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it
lakes
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lake
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areas
, and the least
attravtive
Correct your spelling
attractive
areas
with fewer
number of
Correct quantifier usage
apply
show examples
visitors
are
Wrong verb form
were
show examples
mountins
Correct your spelling
mountains
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, areas, coast, destinations, thousands with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Significant
  • Trends
  • Comparative analysis
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Growth
  • Decline
  • Steady
  • Surge
  • Plummet
  • Consistency
  • Highlight
  • Reinforce
  • Data representation
  • Time frame
  • Subject matter
  • Overseas visitors
  • Tourism promotion
  • Transportation
  • Accommodation facilities
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