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The chart below shows how routinely people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

The chart below shows how routinely people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
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The chart below shows how routinely
people
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 in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. The frequency of eating fast food among
people
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 which they preferred five different times is obvious in different percentages every 3 years. In detail,
according to
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 2003, over %30 of
people
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 chose to eat once a week,
while
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 %30 ate twice a month these numbers were the highest
due to
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 the bar graph. In 2006, those who marked every day or never reached %5, and the rest were 15 and over.
People
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 who eat several times a week and
people
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 who eat a few times a year show almost the same percentage, one of them is 15 and the other is more than 15.
Finally
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, those who selected once or twice a month had the highest result, about %35.
To conclude
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, in
USA
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the USA
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people
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 regularly preferred to eat once a week or once or twice a month

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fast food consumption
  • Frequency
  • Dining trends
  • Demographic factors
  • Peak periods
  • Downward/upward trend
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Nutritional awareness
  • Economic impact
  • Health implications
  • Convenience foods
  • Eating habits
  • Statistical evidence
  • Year-over-year comparison
  • Fluctuation
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