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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts showed how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts showed how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The amount of table
has
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shows
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 shown police
budget
where
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and where
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 the money came from, and
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the charts
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charts
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chart
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 percentages
has provides
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provide
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 how it was
distributedvon
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distributed on
 the police
budget
 from 2017 to 2018.
A
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At a
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 glance at
accompanying
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the accompanying
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 data, there is
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a raise
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raise
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rise
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 in 2018 than 2017, but
number
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a number
the number
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 of
spent
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spending
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are
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is
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 gradually dwindling during these
periode
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periods
.
Overall
,
police
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the police
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budget
are
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is
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increase
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increased
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 in 2018, and the highest income
are
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is
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 from local taxes which
climb
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climbed
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 from 91.2m to 102.3m. Looking
more
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at more
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 details
that
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the
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 slowest climb of
budget
 from other
resouce
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resources
 (eg grants) by only adding 0,5m than a year before.
National
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The national
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goverment
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government
spent
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spending
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 gradually
increase
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increased
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 by 2,3%.
According to
percentages
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the percentages
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 of money
was
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apply
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spent, there is
decrease
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a decrease
the decrease
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of
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in
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salaries
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the salaries
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 of the officers and staff from 75% to 69%, in
compare
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comparison
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 with the
increase
of
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in
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 technology spent which is
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an increase
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increase
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increased
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 from 8% to 14%. Building and transport
has
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have
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 stagnancy percentage in 2017 by 17% and
also
 17% in 2018.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, increase with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "climb" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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